Hey guys, as you probably know I'm new here, and this is my first fanfic here, but I think it's pretty good. By the way, I support this pairing 110% Here we go! Chapter 1: The dawn sun shined in Lionblaze's eyes, making him stir after a good night's rest. He lifted his head, taking in the scene of waking warriors climbing out of their nests. Dawn Patrol he thought. He glanced to his side, realizing that Icecloud had moved her nest nest to his, and recognizing the feel of fur on fur for the first time. He settled back down, her warmth welcome.
"Lionblaze!"Lionblaze opened his eyes to find the barbed-tounged Dustpelt hovering over him. "Wake up! The dawn patrol has already come back, and you promised Dovepaw that you would train her today." He already had the lesson planned; sneak attacks, utilizing her incredible sensing powers, as one of the three. Her training is going extremely well for only 2 moons he thought to himself as he walked out of the warriors den, shacking clinging moss off his pelt. If it keeps up like this, she'll become a warrior in only a moon or so. He met Dovepaw at the fresh kill pile, and padded to the Sky Oak, a perfect place to practice surprising an enemy from a tree. "Alright, Dovepaw, When you hear an enemy coming, and you know he's stronger than you, you can gain an edge by jumping down on him from a low branch. A tree gives you cover from sight and smell, so when you sense an enemy coming, look for a tree close by if you plan to attack"
He was finished with his lesson and decided that he and his apprentice should go hunting on the way back to the camp. He was stalking a shrew when Dovepaw's urgent mew rang out. "Did you hear that?" she asked. "Probebly not" he replied bluntly."You're the one who can hear and things all the way across the lake" "It's Icecloud" She continued, seemingly unaware of Lionblazes comment. She twitched her ears rapidly as she spoke."…She's in trouble…By the Shadowclan border!"
Duh,Duh,DUH! Hope you like! I'll continue with the chapter if I receive some positive feedback so for now, sees ya'
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Wow! This is so good! Post more, please. Oh, and some helpful critisism. Check for spell errors, like: Shaking clinging moss off his pelt. Other than that, its great!
Originally posted by Saberclaw66: Thanks! send me a link to it.
uh i am guessing u were talking to me and idk how to put a link thingy on a post but it is somewhere in the first page of discussions as JayxWillow fanfic- IT IS AWESOME!!! jk but i really dont kno so plz read
I actually read both of your stories while I was waiting to be accepted (I waited so *bleep*in long) and they're both awesome! Silverfire's made me want to right this! Oh, and leafxcrowxforever, I left a comment on the thread! I'll post the rest of Chapter 1 a little later. TNXS for the feedback guys!
At that Lionblaze darted through the trees to the border, checking once or twice along the way to see if Dovepaw was managing to keep up. All alone? With no other warriors. There could be an entire patrol and -He stopped his thinking, wondering why he felt so worried, so…intensely-almost passionately. He didn't have time to answer his question, because suddenly, the trees thinned out and disappeared into the clearing that marked the border with Shadowclan. He immediately saw Icecloud, snarling at four Shadowclan cats. He identified Oakfur, Crowfrost Rowanclaw, and an apprentice he had never seen before. They all had prey at their feet. "Prey-Stealers!" Icecloud snarled. "Get off our territory!" Lionblaze couldn't help but wonder how she could make demands while up against 4 enemy cats. "We'll go where we want to go!" Oakfur snarled in reply. "It's not like you can stop all 4 of us". Lionblaze decided now was time to intervene."Maybe not, but I can" he said as he stepped out of the bushes. He took a glance at Icecloud, and saw something-not anger, but something else-flicker in her eyes for a moment when she saw him looking at her. He took it as nothing and brought his gaze back to the enemy cats. "Get off our territory, or you'll wish you've never been kitted" he snarled. Oakfur took a step forward. "How about I'll show you how easily a petty Thunderclan cat can be defeated". At that he lunged for Lionblaze, but he expected the Shadowclan cat to do that, and jumped backwards reaching out with his claws and getting a hold on his shoulder. Lionblaze used his strength and threw Oakfur down to the ground, then released his grip and scratched at his flank until he ran back across the border. Suddenly, the 2 other warriors lunged at him. He used every once of strength in his hind legs to spring straight up and land on Rowanclaw's back. The force of the impact pinned the senior warrior, and Lionblaze cuffed him over the ear. He let Rowanclaw flee across the border just in time to see Crowfrost lunge at, but it was too late to react. The Shadowclan warrior was on his back, but before he could deliver any claw or bite marks, Lionblaze Sprung backwards, landing on his back with a defeated Crowfrost crippled under him. Lionblaze rose, planted a paw on Crowfrost's chest and hissed in his ear; "Get out, and don't ever come back". At that he lifted his paw and the Shadowclan cat vanished across the border, herding the fearful-eyed apprentice with him. Lionblaze looked for wounds and found nothing. Like always, not a scratch on him. Even with his power he could still take minor woods, but his battle skills saved him from those. As he was walking back to tell Firestar of the events at the border, he told Dovepaw to go ahead and collect their catches. Now he heard Icecloud fall in beside him."That was incredible! You took on 3 warriors at the same time and barely got wounded! You saved me" She licked his check gently. Suddenly a warm feeling welled inside him, and he couldn't suppress a purr. What am I doing?! I'm one of the three, I can't love! He thought as he padded into the clearing to tell his leader about the border skirmish.
Hope you all like, and I'll go on to Chapter 2 if I get some more Positive feedback. For now, Sees ya'!
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so for now, sees ya'
